oh, I loved it Rosemary, totally believable, beautifully written and told. We may feel frustrated that we were never given this part of Hal's backstory in Being Human, but then, we would never have the inspiration for wonderful fanfics such as yours.
Just started reading the fan fiction. This was a tremendous back story, expanding so beautifully on what we already knew, totally fitting in with Hal's character. Loved it.